Dark Star

AMAZING! i really have no words to describe how beautifully written your poem was. it was very intense but at the same time not to a point of being draged ...

i liked this poem, though it could use a little touching up. i really like the idea (though it is spelled Gustav, not Gostav). your poem is a dark story, ...

i liked it!! it was mellow and sweet and still came though with lots of emotion. one gets a happy-sad feeling when reading this. it gives one an appritication for ...

i really liked this poem. it was very dark, and deep. there was lots of emotion that poured out through your words. i could sense all the pain that the ...

well i must say, this is a lot better. more clear,and a lot more emotion is present now that things are a little more "brought together". good job!!!

alright. this poem was deep and dark. it was good but you want to make it GREAT. so first of all... P-U-N-C-T-U-A-T-I-O-N!!!! this is so vital. i cant emphisize it ...

was a good atempt but a miserable fail. you deffinatly NEED PUCTUATION!!!! i found it a little confusing and i desperate need of said above...you have so much inside you're ...

your welcome...any time! =]

thanks for pointing that out (blackened). you were right. :) thanx!

wow...that is soo much better!!!so much more powerful and just overwelming with emotion!! the first stanza is 110% better then before and all the little changes that you made brought ...

short and sweet, but lack of interest. it isnt very spasifac and doesnt hold any emotion is the words. "Nobler and nobler, my dearest friend, be true to yourself as ...

the poem is good but lacks some vital "things". first off, im not feeling all that much emotion. the words are there but their meaning is empty. the poem lacks ...

well over all the poem was good. deffinatly need some reworking though and the rhyming is a bit "amature". the first three stanzas were good but then things got a ...

the poem was pretty good. i found it a little "conventional" but at the same time powerful and full of emotion. i agree about the last stanza... i dont know ...

Black Hearts, Dark Shadows At every corner evil lurks. A shiver makes all hairs on end. No longer strong, temptation smirks. Tongue of mortar so courage pretends. Walls dance with ...